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Title: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
Post by: bayonetbrant on November 14, 2014, 06:52:04 AM
Migsy's review of Falling Skies is up today (http://grogheads.com/?p=6619).  Your thoughts below!
Title: Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
Post by: BanzaiCat on November 14, 2014, 08:28:01 AM
Good review. Indeed, it looks just like Enemy Unknown.

I caught a few errors - feel free to implement or completely ignore me on these. :)


In the first paragraph, note that "Massachusetts" is half italicized. Was it supposed to be fully italicized? I'd say it doesn't need italics at all.

Second paragraph: looks like there's a space in "adventures" between the 'e' and the 's' at the end.

First bullet point under second paragraph: "fair" should be "fare." ("How will Falling Skies fare...") Also, this first bullet point should have punctuation as the second bullet point has punctuation (place a question mark at the end of the first bullet point, as the author is asking a question).

First paragraph under "The Mechanics" - why is the Oxford comma not used? ("...food, metal and medical supplies" should be "...food, metal, and medical supplies" - at least with that mechanism in place, unless you guys do the dirty APA/UK style of reporting.) This is throughout, but I understand it is a stylistic thing and not everyone believes in the Oxford Comma (blasphemy!).  :)

Under "Getting Tactical," '4 to 6' should technically be 'four to six.' Always spell out numbers under 10 and numbers 10 or higher get the number treatment, unless starting a paragraph (never start a paragraph with a number under 10). That's just the dirty technical writer in me talking.

Second paragraph under "The Sky Is Falling," 'attack' should be plural.

Title: Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
Post by: MIGMaster on November 14, 2014, 09:19:33 AM
Awesome - I told ya he'd catch 'em all Brant !  ;)
Title: Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
Post by: Shelldrake on November 16, 2014, 08:12:57 AM
Nice review Migs. I wondered about this game...now I know to pass on it.  O0
Title: Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
Post by: Staggerwing on November 16, 2014, 08:17:00 AM
Quote from: bayonetbrant on November 14, 2014, 06:52:04 AM
Missy's review of Falling Skies is up today (http://grogheads.com/?p=6619).  Your thoughts below!

'Missy'?

Sumpin' you ain't tellin' us Migs?


Nice review BTW. O0
Title: Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
Post by: bayonetbrant on November 16, 2014, 11:01:23 AM
Quote from: Staggerwing on November 16, 2014, 08:17:00 AM
'Missy'?

F'n autocorrect...
Title: Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
Post by: Boggit on November 16, 2014, 07:16:43 PM
Nice review. O0
Title: Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
Post by: MIGMaster on November 18, 2014, 09:49:57 AM
Thanks guys ~ Migsy ;D