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Feedback on review of Falling Skies
« on: November 14, 2014, 04:52:04 AM »
Migsy's review of Falling Skies is up today.  Your thoughts below!
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Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
« Reply #1 on: November 14, 2014, 06:28:01 AM »
Good review. Indeed, it looks just like Enemy Unknown.

I caught a few errors - feel free to implement or completely ignore me on these. :)


In the first paragraph, note that "Massachusetts" is half italicized. Was it supposed to be fully italicized? I'd say it doesn't need italics at all.

Second paragraph: looks like there's a space in "adventures" between the 'e' and the 's' at the end.

First bullet point under second paragraph: "fair" should be "fare." ("How will Falling Skies fare...") Also, this first bullet point should have punctuation as the second bullet point has punctuation (place a question mark at the end of the first bullet point, as the author is asking a question).

First paragraph under "The Mechanics" - why is the Oxford comma not used? ("...food, metal and medical supplies" should be "...food, metal, and medical supplies" - at least with that mechanism in place, unless you guys do the dirty APA/UK style of reporting.) This is throughout, but I understand it is a stylistic thing and not everyone believes in the Oxford Comma (blasphemy!).  :)

Under "Getting Tactical," '4 to 6' should technically be 'four to six.' Always spell out numbers under 10 and numbers 10 or higher get the number treatment, unless starting a paragraph (never start a paragraph with a number under 10). That's just the dirty technical writer in me talking.

Second paragraph under "The Sky Is Falling," 'attack' should be plural.


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Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
« Reply #2 on: November 14, 2014, 07:19:33 AM »
Awesome - I told ya he'd catch 'em all Brant !  ;)

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Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
« Reply #3 on: November 16, 2014, 06:12:57 AM »
Nice review Migs. I wondered about this game...now I know to pass on it.  O0
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Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
« Reply #4 on: November 16, 2014, 06:17:00 AM »
Missy's review of Falling Skies is up today.  Your thoughts below!

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Nice review BTW. O0
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Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
« Reply #5 on: November 16, 2014, 09:01:23 AM »
The key to surviving this site is to not say something which ends up as someone's tag line - Steelgrave

"their citizens (all of them counted as such) glorified their mythology of 'rights'...and lost track of their duties. No nation, so constituted, can endure." Robert Heinlein, Starship Troopers

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Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
« Reply #6 on: November 16, 2014, 05:16:43 PM »
Nice review. O0
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Re: Feedback on review of Falling Skies
« Reply #7 on: November 18, 2014, 07:49:57 AM »
Thanks guys ~ Migsy ;D